For this post I am going to be revising the scene I made in blog post 5. This scene is giving me the foundation I am going to use in my first formal assignment in this class. This scene is supposed to reflect a part in my life where someone made a bad design and it had a negative impact on me.
“BANG, BANG, BANG!” I hear a loud noise as I’m in the shower, but the running water is too loud to identify where its coming from. I end my shower abruptly to see what it is. I grabbed my towel and start drying off. I hear the banging again just to realize its on my bathroom door followed by yelling. All I hear is “Erin come quick!” and I recognized the voice. I am now panicked and begin to rush. I step out of the bathroom only just to see my friend Lindsey passed out on the bed and my other friend Maddie just hovering over her franticly trying to check her blood sugars. She is covered head to toe in sand. Her already pale skin has turned to a ghostly white. The panicked feeling returned. “I can’t figure this thing out!” Maddie yells as she’s trying to set up Lindsey’s diabetic supplies “what the hell happened?” I said to Maddie with a crack in my voice. Maddie replied “I--- I don’t know, I just saw Ryan carrying her off the beach and he said she was throwing up” “I was only gone 30 minutes; how could this have happened?” I check her blood sugars just for her meter screen to read “HI”. We’ve only been in the Bahamas for six hours now, but I can only imagine how much alcohol she has consumed in that time frame not even including how much sugar could’ve been in those fruity drinks. I instantly felt frustration towards her. Not only was I scared for her life, but this is something I would never expect coming from her. The strong smell of alcohol was radiating off of her as she tried to form words together. I left the beach early to start getting ready for the club later on that night but from the looks of Lindsey, I wasn’t going anywhere. Maddie left me because she felt as if this wasn’t her problem to deal with. My heart ached for her, I wouldn’t wish this on anyone. I rinsed her off in the shower as the alcohol starts to wear off. “I’m sorry” Lindsey tells me I felt a bit of relief knowing she was going to be okay.
5 Comments
10/4/2018 11:16:04 am
Heck of a story and being across the country in a stressful situation like that had to be alarming at best. Very good read!
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Amir
10/7/2018 10:59:07 am
A bit suspenseful. I like it, but i didn't enjoy knowing that this actually did happen and knowing someone actually did get hurt but i liked knowing they would be okay.
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Nick D'Aversa
10/8/2018 01:25:45 pm
For a brief second I thought this was about a friend of mine's spring break because a lot of the names are similar and this sounded close to what happened to his group.
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10/8/2018 07:49:57 pm
I loved this story a lot! It was very detailed, suspensful and realistic! I can relate because I have a diabetic friend and their sugars all over the place. You're a great friend and handle situations responsibly!
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Ryan Boyer
10/8/2018 08:19:37 pm
I enjoyed that you jumped right into the action like how people talked about in class. Good work cant wait to read more.
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